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A poem I'd like to share
#1
Hi y'all
I wrote this poem a long time ago but i found it on my DA profile that I just regained access to! Anyway, I really like it and i think folks here might find resonance with it. 
It's okay if you don't understand it all, i don't always understand my own thoughts or writing either, haha! 
I have not written anything like this in years so re-reading it may get my creative juices flowing Smile

i'm getting ready for bed
the phone rings, but it's just a letter
my heart aches but it'll get better
i'm just trying to do my thing
but doing it for me, is harder than i thought
buy some roses with money but love can't be bought

solitude and loneliness are not the same
one brings peace, the other despair
ridiculous, am I? to wish not to care
the one I see while the other eats at my soul
confiding my desires to an empty door
the windows are painted and i'm staring at the floor

eject the illusions and read what is right
left among illness and yet replete
my essence developed yet full of deceit
what lies beneath, neither rod nor cone
true sight true mind no bias desired
ignore this feeling and you shall be retired

lace and wool were both threads, aye
but in the eye their appeal, reserved
formulate the answer that we are deserved
restraint and hedonism are wont to spar
while that lethal and beauty do often combine
and working as a combine reaps, evil divine

divinities unknown take form in flesh
release their judgment on kings and fools
make no distinction as if they were mules
distraught and weathered we animals do pray
unbeknownst to us whether it is heard
believing our souls to carry a word
A bucket full of wishes... is sometimes too heavy

Loved  Gloomy
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(10-08-2018, 11:47 AM)UnicornSmudge Wrote: Hi y'all
I wrote this poem a long time ago but i found it on my DA profile that I just regained access to! Anyway, I really like it and i think folks here might find resonance with it. 
It's okay if you don't understand it all, i don't always understand my own thoughts or writing either, haha! 
I have not written anything like this in years so re-reading it may get my creative juices flowing Smile

i'm getting ready for bed
the phone rings, but it's just a letter
my heart aches but it'll get better
i'm just trying to do my thing
but doing it for me, is harder than i thought
buy some roses with money but love can't be bought

solitude and loneliness are not the same
one brings peace, the other despair
ridiculous, am I? to wish not to care
the one I see while the other eats at my soul
confiding my desires to an empty door
the windows are painted and i'm staring at the floor

eject the illusions and read what is right
left among illness and yet replete
my essence developed yet full of deceit
what lies beneath, neither rod nor cone
true sight true mind no bias desired
ignore this feeling and you shall be retired

lace and wool were both threads, aye
but in the eye their appeal, reserved
formulate the answer that we are deserved
restraint and hedonism are wont to spar
while that lethal and beauty do often combine
and working as a combine reaps, evil divine

divinities unknown take form in flesh
release their judgment on kings and fools
make no distinction as if they were mules
distraught and weathered we animals do pray
unbeknownst to us whether it is heard
believing our souls to carry a word

as a poet and writer myself. i enjoyed reading this. Would love to share poetry with you..as its pretty much always been my outlet
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@Serenity2b
I am so glad you enjoyed this, thanks for commenting Smile it's more rhymey than most things I've written.
Please share your work! I am sure i am not the only one here who would like to read it Smile
A bucket full of wishes... is sometimes too heavy

Loved  Gloomy
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#4
I read this post when it was first posted but never commented, something that I now realize I should have done. I like this poem a lot. It definitely resonates with me as I reread it and I can understand where your coming from @UnicornSmudge. I find that some of my best poetry comes from when I feel something, that moment when you harness the emotional rollercoaster and put it to paper. I don't know if it's the same for you but just rereading this has made me decide to share a few of my poems on here. Hopefully you find time to write more, I think you definitely have the talent.
There is darkness all around and darkness inside.
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@jman197 thank you so much, I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem. Yes, for me, I don't really write unless the words are already begging to pour through a pen, and it is usually during some time of emotional turbulence. For some reason, I have not written much of anything in the last few years, but maybe I will begin to write once more. I will look forward to reading your poems, I saw that you posted them and they are on my list :-)
A bucket full of wishes... is sometimes too heavy

Loved  Gloomy
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