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I put off posting this
#1

because I couldn't think of a title.
I still can't.
So I decided to ask you all for suggestions instead.

Here we go now, Here we go

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Untitled [sup]© 2007, EyeScream[/sup]

The idea for this poem
Was long ago locked up
    In a vault,
      In the corner,
          Of a room,
            In the under ground,
                Of a seldom visited

Museum.

So if you should disagre-a
Remember, it wasn't my idea
I'm thinking of the mudslide
That caused its walls to crumble.
Such an event should not be a
Precipitate to a poem
But this one let loose an idea
From the cellar of that museum.

It started with a rumble,
Then changed to a lightning flash...

And I thought Wow, that was fast.

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Please don't ask me what it means... I don't know.
But it really needs a title, so I could use your thoughts.

   
The Universe is expanding<br />But I don't feel a damn thing<br />There's nothing you can do about it <br />Keep on dancing<br /><br />- That Handsome Devil, &quot;Loving Parasite&quot;
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#2
precipitate
is an awesome word.
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#3
(06-17-2009, 07:32 AM)snuggles link Wrote: precipitate
is an awesome word.

Yeah, but it ain't part of the solution!  Wink
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#4
Just came across your poem,

love the imagery and the idea  of a Museum  as part of a poem is new to my mind but very
interesting.

have you come up with a title?

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- i must have missed when i was'nt on CSS as much-
thanks for sharing your work,
I liked reading it    :APD:
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#5
(01-31-2010, 07:40 PM)Cordelia link Wrote: have you come up with a title?

no  :-\
The Universe is expanding<br />But I don't feel a damn thing<br />There's nothing you can do about it <br />Keep on dancing<br /><br />- That Handsome Devil, &quot;Loving Parasite&quot;
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