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seasons... - liz - 12-10-2009
languish a daisy
in mid-august sun
awaiting a morrow
when summer is done
withered and wilted
from autumn's cool breath
anticipating
the winter's sweet death
springtime arrives
the cycle begins
on fragile green wings
birth growth and the end.
Re: seasons... - JenniLynne - 12-10-2009
I thought that was really pretty liz..... Thanks for sharing it.......
Peace & :ht:,
Jenni
Re: seasons... - Cordelia - 12-10-2009
...flows very well...
intersting take on the cycles of nature and life.
I hope my death is sweet and not sour!
thanks for sharing,
Cordelia
Re: seasons... - Beacon - 12-10-2009
(12-10-2009, 12:38 AM)liz link Wrote:languish a daisy
in mid-august sun
awaiting a morrow
when summer is done
withered and wilted
from autumn's cool breath
anticipating
the winter's sweet death
springtime arrives
the cycle begins
on fragile green wings
birth growth and the end.
Very nice, Liz.
But on a critical note, the last paragraph doesn't scan as well as the first two...